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PostSubject: Fallen Earth   Thu May 15, 2014 9:55 am

I am Alpha and Omega, the beginning and the ending, saith the Lord, which is , and which was, and which is to come, the Almighty.-Revelations
Prologue
The end of the world as we know it came like a thief in the night. No man,woman or child saw it coming at first we it happened all the Doomsday worshipers came out of where they were hanging out and were excited the great Judgement day had come at last they said. boy were they surprised. you see there was no rapture.
You see what happened was that first every electronic thing cars, phones ,TV's everything just died completely out of the blue and then the phones ,radios and even the TV came back playing this lovely and very disturbing music like some choir singing. and then just like that there was this great big flash of light for a few moments it felt like some one had just set off a bomb i mean that was what we thought happened. we were blind for awhile we couldn't see our own hands. when everything finally cleared up and they were just there the angels beautiful creatures with splendid white wings. Then they just started killing every one left and right. This wasn't an isolated incident either all across the globe they came down and everything changed.    
 


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PostSubject: Re: Fallen Earth   Thu May 15, 2014 11:38 am

still working on it

this is a story about a fairly Biblical end of the world kinda of thing but while it is mostly based of of what it says in the bible other religions will play an important part in this so please don't get mad at me about some stuff it says also this is done during school so sorry if it just ends abruptly


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PostSubject: Re: Fallen Earth   Thu May 15, 2014 10:54 pm

I want to know what happens next. Good start, but I saw a few grammatical errors. Remember, every time you make a typo, the errorists win.
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PostSubject: Re: Fallen Earth   Mon May 19, 2014 4:03 pm

"We have adorned everything on earth, in order to test them, and thus distinguish those among them who work righteousness. Inevitably, We will wipe out everything on it, leaving it completely barren" 18:7-8-Quran
Chapter 1
The screaming woke me from my nightmares of the past. I sat up and look around the small desolate barn i had fallen asleep in just a few minutes ago. Straw jutting out of my dark hair in all places my skin was scratchy and i was questioning if i was the one screaming when they started up again{BELL RANG }
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