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PostSubject: Pj's Poet Tree   Sun May 11, 2014 8:45 pm

So I wrote this poem a few weeks ago. It's really my first attempt at light-hearted poetry. I really like how it came out, though.

The Cap'n's Wife

I'm the captain of a ship
Living a lonely life at sea
But when asked whether I have a wife
I answer yes, but she
Is better than any ordinary wife
As faithful as the sea

She follows me every day
Slinking behind me
Nipping at my heels

On the deck of my ship, she follows me
As I bark orders at my crew
And silently she stands by me

She's always been there
A comfort
Following in my footsteps

At night I know not where she goes
Whether she stays by my side
Perhaps she leads a secret life
While I'm dreaming of my own

Perhaps she steals away
And spends the night with the dolphins
Perhaps they dance and play
Until they say good morning to the moon

But I know this cannot be
She's faithful as the steady sea
The only wife I've ever known
My shadow and me
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PostSubject: Re: Pj's Poet Tree   Sun May 11, 2014 9:31 pm

That's a really cute little poem! I can't write any poetry that isn't serious. Even then, my poetry isn't too good. I do like writing them when I feel influenced to, though.

You should post some in the critique section!
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PostSubject: Re: Pj's Poet Tree   Sun May 11, 2014 9:48 pm

I would, but I don't have anything that really shines like that. If I post something to the critique section, I want it to be as good as possible so that I can focus on polishing my gems instead of my crap.
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PostSubject: Re: Pj's Poet Tree   Sun May 11, 2014 10:01 pm

Oh, it's not crap at all! Honestly everything of yours that I've read so far has been really good. You should definitely start posting in the critique section.
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PostSubject: Re: Pj's Poet Tree   Wed May 14, 2014 12:00 am

I agree with with, brandy.  I know this isn't in the critique section but if it were I would have a very good critique about it


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